Freedom's Place For Poetry

I haven't written any poems in a looong time... a couple of years at least, so don't be to hard on me ^_^
I got inspiration from reading through the poems in some poetry topics here, and decided I'd give it a try again... though I never made poems in English before... so here are my first tries at poetry in a long time, and my first attempt to write them in English :P

I don't really know what this first one's about... sometimes I write poetry like my stories, an idea hits me, I begin to write and I'll see what comes out and sometimes I already got a whole idea of what it's about before I write something down... this first one is from the first category.

I look back
Back at you
Back at me
Back at us

But most of all
I look back
At what we had
At what we should’ve had
At what we didn’t have

Memories
Haunting my thoughts
Haunting my dreams

Scars
Covering my body
Covering my soul

I should move on
Should go further
I shouldn’t turn around
Shouldn’t look back

But I just did
And found myself lost
Lost in you
Yet again


I've camped a number of times in my life. This was inspired by those times.

Sounds awake me
Early in the morning
Dogs barking, birds singing
Yet I still need sleep

Though it seems
Peace isn’t allowed
Children crying, others laughing
Yet I’m still tired

The air is hot
I feel exhausted
Searching for the zipper
Longing for a fresh breeze

Opening up my tent
I fall into the soft grass
As a gentle wind
Caresses my skin

I know
I’m ready for a new day

So, tell me what you think ^_^

i like the first one it was clear to me that it was about a relationship gone wrong rather fast like the 1st/2nd line do not quite like the 2nd one, have not been to camping either but... just do not get that feeling o.- u know ?

it seems to me like camping when youre at abunai XD anyway I do know the feeling and although where I camped children werent crying and I heard 'sprinkhanen'(locusts are they called?) making their sound XD

ehm.. grasshoppers is the more common word... ehm.. locust ye guess it is the same although that is more referred to the more ferocious form. And ye some poems, u kinda just cannot interact with it because of lack of experience maybe after i have really camped that i'd like it more {camping in the last year of elementery school was not much of a camping trip (_ _) }

lol well I honestly can't call camping being in a tent in the yard of my family in Spain while we were there on holiday (there were no rooms left and it was either the attic(incredibly hot there) or the tent. :P

to stay on topic your poems really do have Rhythm, rhyme too in an other way like sick/thick day/way :P I like it alot

@ Thumbs: Yeah the first one's about a relationship, but I didn't neccesarily mean it to be about a relationship between lovers or anything... that's how most people would probably see it, but it can be about any kind of relationship, lovers, friends, even a parent-child relationship... and the second one, you can't really get the feeling of it when you haven't camped yet I'm afraid ^^;;

@ Kev: well, when I went to Abunai, I only went one day and didn't camp there. So I don't know how it goes there, but camping is camping, right? :P I just went camping a lot with my parents when we were on holydays... we never really slept in hotels or anything xD...
And about the rhyme thing, I try to avoid the sick/thick day/way kinda rhyme, as you call it, as much as possible. I don't know if it's the right word for it, but it can make a poem sound a bit childish when used to much, or used in the wrong way... so I don't use it unless I think it improves the poem.

well i did not necessarily suggest a relationship between lovers as most friendships i have had ended up like that

Well, here are another 2 poems I've written... virual cookies for the first one to guess from who's point of view the first one is :D (isn't that hard xD)

There’s the smell of fire
Hanging in the air
Smoke is all around me
Ashes everywhere

Silently I crawl
Through dark and eerie caves
It’s not something for weaklings
Only for the braves

Battle cries are heard
From the distant war
I’m in here all alone
Few dare to come this far

The ones that dare are fools
Fools who’ll meet my claws
Fools that won’t survive
They’re bound here by my laws

And once they feel
My burning breath
Those fools will soon
Meet their death


Everytime I'm at the beach, which isn't really often, I just have to get into the water, no matter how cold it is (though I've never been there in winter xD) and so, when I finally get to go to the beach, there aren't many people that really want to go into the water with me... but for some reason, I don't really care as long as I can go. That's what inspired this poem.

I fumble with my feet
Get sand between my toes
My skin is getting burned
Yet it still not shows

Running to the water
Crushing shells under my feet
Ignoring the icy cold
Splashing, losing heat

The sun is shining bright
Waves come crashing down
Though I’m all alone
Still, I will not frown

Noticed how the poems are like opposites? haha :P I like it...
well, that's it for now I guess ^_^

ehm... 1st one is about a dragon and the 2nd well actually i like them both although i prefer the 2nd one more ^^ consider myself to be more of a snake then a dragon

Well done Thumbs *hands over virtual cookies* here ya go ^_^ though it wasn't that hard to figure it out xD ...
Oh and by the way... Dragons are so much more awesome than snakes just so you know

just like the entire thong thing they do o.o dunno ... just one of my weird quirks (_ _)

Two poems I just wrote... I didn't have a very good day and I'm kinda depressed at the moment, so that explains most I think...

Eyes
Staring at me
Hundreds of them
And yet I’m still alone

Eyes
Always watching me
Thousands of them
And yet they don’t reach me

Eyes
Wondering
Asking
Though never coming close

I can’t stand it
I lock myself away
Away from the world
Away from those eyes





Sitting in the darkness
Far away from everything
Hurt and alone
Waiting for that someone
To come and save me

Clutching my heart
Laying vulnerable in my hands
Scarred and bruised
Waiting for that someone
That’s able to heal it

I’m screaming
Screaming for help
Someone drag me out of here
Someone hold me tight
Though my cries go unheard

Laying in the darkness
Even darker than before
Tears run down my face
And I know
That no-one will ever find me

i quite like both of them actually, can relate to both of them i like the first one because u managed to write a lot about something that is actually a small topic. Ehm... the 2nd one, well basically it is something we can all relate to at some point in our life, although it does not rhyme so much it does have a nice rhytm in it

Apparently I'm on a roll today... so here's another one


I want someone here
To hold me just for a while
Two strong arms around me
To hold me when I cry

To keep me safe and warm
Protect me from threats
To love me forever
Until after death